Disc-Co's Trash Bin (poems, lyrics, whateva)

juz like the title sez, this thread contain useless junk art from me, so excuse me if my art really bad

startin' off with poems...

Quote :

Dark Surrounding


Darkness surrounds me…
There is no one besides me…
In this hell of nothingness…
I stand alone…

Will be there a light?
A light that will make this darkness gone…
A light that will keep me away from darkness…
Yet, I still haven’t found it…

Where can I find my light?
Where can I find someone?
Where can I run away from here?
This nothingness that never end…

I’ve waited for a long time…
I’ve waited for a long time…
I’ve waited for a long time…
I’ve waited for a long time…

Akira sez that he will take this poems to one of many scene in Magus VN, dunno 'bout the fact though

Hmm, a good poem, disc-co san~

but still, I feel that this sorta.... plain?

still lack of emotion..

Maap klo aneh-aneh yah...

puisi gwa kalo kata temen gwa yg juga penulis puisi emang kurang kerasa emosinya, tapi dia bilang gwa lebih kuat di filosofi dari puisi yg gwa buat

well, gwa sih bodo amat dengan teori ini-itu, yg namanya karya yg baik adalah karya yg datang dari hati

dasar..

klo mo lebih enak ngekspresiin puisi yah, apalagi pake bahasa inggris, belajar dari kata-katanya Edgar Allan Poe sama Robert Burns. tapi yang Burns nggak begitu disarankan sih... inggrisnya ribet banget.

ato shakespeare juga bagus...

gwa blom pernah liat puisi orang2 bule, kecuali puisi bikinan temen gwa dan guru bahasa Indonesia gwa

hoho... buat puisi ato apapun yg penting enjoy... kalo mau diseriusin baru...

puisi Disc-Co ini aku baca agak2 gmn githu.. keren XD

hahahahahah

emosinya masih kurang dalem yah

emang susah seih membangkitkan emosi klo pake bahasa inggris hoho

new trash arrives~~~

Quote :

Existence


Distant smile move closely to me
Smile that very warm to me
Smile that I haven't seen it before
Smile that have a special meaning to me

In the day I breath
In the day I live
In the day I exist
That smile slowly approach me

Until the day I realize
That I live in different way
I live in different live
And that smile also different

Distant smile move closely to me
Smile that make my spine chill
Smile that lure me into darkness
Smile that open the gate to my true existence

kalo poems pertama gwa, itu gwa bikin iseng2 dan diliat Akira terus pengen dimasukin ke Magus, tapi kalo yg ini emang dia nyuruh gwa bikin

Firstly, gwa minta maap kalo puisi gwa gak "emosional", soalnya thats really not my thing

gwa lebih suka karya yg mempunyai filosofi yg dalam daripada hanya untuk curahan emosi. Mungkin ini juga ada hubungannya dengan karya2 yg gwa biasa telen (dengerin Metallica dan Audioslave) yg lebih berpenjuru ke arah filsafat

and cara gwa buat puisi juga ngikutin saran dari guru Bahasa Indonesia SMP gwa, dia bilang apapun yg sudah tertulis jangan pernah dihapus lagi (kecuali kalo salah nempatin hurup ato grammar gitu )

but well, this is my art, feel free to criticize it as much as you want, because thats the thing that makes my art can be better in future (=w=)b

Ada beberapa kata yang kurang pas,

[quote=disc-co]
Smile that very warm to me
Smile that I haven't seen it before[/quote]

coba kata-katanya sedikit diacak-acak...

overall bagus kok.. hehehehe

ps: kan kata gw juga cobain... mo gw kasih satu?

ah iya tuh~~

sama kek yg dibilinag Luna

amenag rada aneh di bagian situ aja

hmm~ apa dijadiin
"a smile that looks very warm to me"
"a smile that i never seen it before"

ato yah~~ diacak acak ajah hohoho

"the warmest smile I've ever seen" bagus juga.

yang bawah gw nggak tau ey...

maap nggak bisa bantu...

ah iya tuh bisa bisa

"the warmest smile i've ever seen"

hmm... klo yang bawah pake never soalnya kan
emang maknanya belum bernah liat kan??

klo pake Haven't rada aneh hoho~

"The smile that I've never seen, never seen before."

kepanjangan nggak?

keknya kepanjangan tuh~

mungkin

"The smile that I've never seen before."

wooookay, me know me grammar sux ^^;;

ohooohohohohO~

sabar sabar masss

itu bukan masalah gramm... kok

masalah sastra aja.. soalnya overall kan grammarmu udah perfect... hehhehe

/me jabat tangan Luna~

yup~ ini seih masalah sastra hoho

there's nothIng wrong with the grammar... it just about... err... emotion(?)

hohohoho

another trash comin' up

Quote :

Busted

Intro

Crouching in the dark
Crawling in the night
Felt want to bark
To start dog fight

Hear the gun shouting
Thousand feet marching
Alarm beeping
And missile incoming

Reff:
Clashing in the night sky
Crashing make the flesh fry
Flying to destroy I...
Take-them-all

The guns got jammed
My wings are snapped
This seats sure cramped
Its time to get busted

Reff, Guitar solo, Reff

Outro

itu tadi lirik lagu bikinan gwa buat band gwa...

dapet ide pas maen Ace Combat X dan voila, jadilah lirik beraroma "Trash Metal" ala Megadeth

well, selain lirik2 trash kayak gini, gwa juga lagi coba buat lirik2 lagu yg soft macam "Nothing Else Matter" dari Metallica ato "A Tout Le Monde" bikinan Megadeth, tapi berhubung blom "click" ama musiknya, jadi blom rampung =P

but first of all, I need a lil' comment

wow... liriknya dikit juga.... keliatan gaya Ace Combat nya

gak coba ngepost di vid creation tuh?

pingin tau juga sih lagunya gmn...

kalo di video-in 1 band, bakalan berantakan karena HP memang bukan buat bikin video clip ^^;;

entar kalo ada waktu gwa coba video-in sendirian aja deh, gwa juga lagi berusaha bikin gitar solo yg "catchy"

Wogh,... itu dia.. solo gitar yg "catchy"

hm... maksudnya.. gak coba mainin bagian gitarnya ajah?

sekalian kau yg nyanyi gituh...

Kren, disc~ keren banget...

api kayaknya musiknya bakal aliran keras ya~

sepertinya saia tidak bisa menikmati...

TAPI KEREN! SUGOOOOIIII~

pasti keras lha, kan dah gwa bilang, "Trash Metal"


tapi tenang aja, ada yg "halus" juga kok nanti gwa bikin, walo gak mungkin full akustik gwa bikin

wuhehe... beda banget ama aku yg bikin akustik

dengerin dulu musiknya.. siapa tau bisa diubah ke akustik... tapi gak mungkin yah..

liriknya gak bisa diajak kompromi tuh

ada lirik2 lainnya? bisa buat referensi juga nih